Friday 19 September 2014

3B have been writing a description of their own animals, which they are going to use to rewrite the story of the Hare and the Tortoise.
 
Suddenly I noticed the sharp, venomous teeth glowing in the forest sky. It slithers through the forest with its slim body which slithers silently. Have you ever smelt this amazing creature? It slithers quickly through the pitch black forest. After it slithers through the dark forest it bites with its razor sharp teeth through it’s pray.
Harry (3b)
 
Crunch! Have you ever heard a crack from the dusty foot prints in the leaves? Have you ever seen a wild dog rolling anxiously in the leaves? The dog, who was running silently, darted through the thick forest. Scared, its fur prickled like a sharp knife. Zooming on the forest floor, it danced in the sun. The forest was dark and dim but to him it was a snuggly bed on a cold Sunday morning.
Holly (3b)

4 comments:

  1. We love your use of adjectives. We especially liked how Harry included alliteration. Well done! 1A

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  2. Well done Harry! Keep up the good work. Mum & Dad

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  3. Your work is outstanding! Your use of figurative language is amazing.
    Haddy,5G

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  4. Well done, really good adjectives!!
    Emily 6f

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