Friday 29 November 2013

In Year 3 we have been learning about Egypt. Below are some descriptions we have written about the River Nile. We have been working on using ambitious vocabulary and a question to entice our readers in!


Have you ever seen the deep, blue River Nile? All of a sudden I notice that the River Nile sways across the scorching desert. Suddenly, I smell the salty sea invading my nose. The River Nile is  meandering through the burning desert. Luckily the River Nile is as fearsome as a lion! Swosh! The River Nile runs through Egypt to the rushing sea. The River Nile is being drowned by the crunchy, golden sand. I can taste the salty sea air flying all around me.
Tyler (3B)

Have you ever seen the longest, largest desert? Splash! Kindly, the golden sun shines over the meandering River Nile. The fearsome waves crash against the rocks. Quietly, the silky, golden, smooth desert is as smooth as melted chocolate. The bumpy River Nile smells like the salty sea. All of a sudden the stinky, ancient mummies stand silently in the temple. Usually, the dusty, ancient sphinx stands anxiously in front of the pyramids. The river is a deep, dark swimming pool.

Rosie (3B)

Have you ever seen the deep River Nile? Splash! The River Nile is as deep as quick sand. The River Nile shattered the sea. I heard the salty River Nile growling slowly. The River Nile splashes as I taste it whilst it rushes on the prickly sand.

Aodhfin (3B)

Have you ever seen a huge, massive enormous and large river in ancient Egypt? The river sways side to side across the golden, yellow and salty sand. Kindly, the golden sun shines over the meandering River Nile. I can smell the salty, slippery golden yellow sand and a deep, dark, gloomy pool. The River Nile is a long, wavy meandering pool and sea. All of a sudden it goes through my hands. I hear the waves coming through me. Ker plunk! It sways through my hands. Splash! I sway over the deep, dark, gloomy, shiny River Nile. 
Jewel (3B)

Monday 18 November 2013

In year 3 we have been writing poems about Egypt. Our success criteria focussed on using figurative language and organising our work into verses. We would love to know what you thought!


The Door

Go and open the door,
Maybe there’s a sphinx staring, guarding golden treasure.


Go and open the door,
Maybe there’s a pyramid as tall as a block of flats and as sandy as a beach.


Go and open the door,
Maybe there’s a desert which is as hot as the yellow dazzling sun.


Go and open the door,
Maybe there’s a group of Egyptians that are as noisy as a busy city.


By Thomas M (3G)
 
 
The Door
 
Go and open the door.
Maybe outside a big sphinx is girding the door and staring at you.
 
Go and open the door.
Maybe inside there’s a pyramided as tall as a green shaded tree .
 
Go and open the door.
Maybe the four sons will be there to greet you.
 
Go and open the door.
Inside a mummy will scare you out.
 
 
Go and open the door.
Maybe you will find a desert all alone  
 
By Natasha (3G)
 
 
The Door
Go and open the door.
Maybe there are pyramids shaped like an ice cream cone.
When you go in you might see a forgetful mummy trying to make friends.
 
Go in the door and see.
The four sons bowing to your commands.
They bow like bending trees.
 
Go and open the door.
There is a terrible storm that won’t clear for a day.     
By Jack (3G)                                                                                       
 
The Door
Go and open the door,
There might be a dozy, creepy mummy meandering and a Sphinx guarding lots of sparkling gold.
 
Go and open the door,
There might be a magic city and a giant, sandy pyramid with a Cleopatra greeting people when they go and pray.
 
Go and open the door,
There might be a lovely, bright palace with a Pharaoh helping lots of people.
 
Go and open the door,
There might be a sandstorm but it will clear.
 
 By Harriet (3G)

Friday 15 November 2013

Year 4 have been writing poems about World War 2. Our success criteria focussed on experimenting with language and imagery. The children would love some feedback!



World War Two


Bang! Went the bombs as they hit the ground children screaming all around.
Adults waving goodbye to their child as they won’t be seeing them for quite a while.

Children crying while women wave and men praying for their child’s fate.
Meanwhile men go to war but some sadly drop to the floor.
The bombs run to the ground, people quietly sneak around…

People hiding in the blackout, no light to see about.
They blackened the night until dawn,
They shut all windows including the door.
 
Some women and men will survive but some still will die.
People thinking of running away but say they must stay.
Children thinking they need to go so, that is what they do it’s their only hope.
 

People waiting for the war to end,
Let’s hope they don’t come to a sticky end.

 By Erin 4P
 
 

 

London Town
 
Air raid sirens, screeching noise,
Smash! London is part of a devastating decoy?
Children sobbing, grown-ups too,
The cellar’s like a graveyard,
“I’ll go if you do…”
 
Evacuees on the skipping horse,
Hoping that they stay on course,
Wanting to meet a friendly face,
Wondering if they can cope with the case...
 
 Faces they trust they cannot see,
The atmosphere kicked out all of the glee,
Hoping their new carers are kind,
Thinking about what food they’ll find.
 
By Haddy 4P
 

In the City
 
Boom! Bombs quickly gliding through massive buildings,
Smash! The tremendous trains are cheetahs zooming through grass.
 
Cars colliding and crashing,
Mysterious aeroplanes quickly dashing,
Air raid sirens screeching like rapid wheels speeding across the tarmac.
 
As fear is fiercely enveloping the city,
Chaos will be calling her,
Smoke invading, ashes flaming,
Guns flying to the ground as men are praying.
 
Weeping women waving away,
Mindful men nodding to the ground,
Children stepping on the train leaving town,
They look at faces and see frowns.
 
 By Asher 4P

 

Wednesday 23 October 2013

In year four we have been writing a narrative using the 'Once in a life time' film clip below. Here is an extract from Maddison's in 4E.

http://www.literacyshed.com/the-fantasy-shed.html

One day an old man was out flying his spectacular ship above the clouds.  Suddenly a bunch of tremendous turtles came flowing swiftly past the old man and his flying ship.  In the wink of an eye he had a marvellous idea in his head, he grabbed his rope and tossed it round the glowing turtles head.

He was hoping it would pull his creaky ship for him but no! The calm turtle wobbled and wiggled as much as he could so that the rope would snap.

Suddenly the rope did snap .The old man was so upset he started to cry.   He thought he was the most unluckiest man in the world.

Luckily one more turtle came flowing calmly past.  He had to make a quick choice.  To jump on to the turtle, which is a risk of losing his life, or stay here with no food, which would eventually end his life.  He decided to jump PLOP! He landed on the shell of the turtle.